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Aden Seerat
Aden Seerat
Bloomfield Hall School
Some Thing In In The Room (part 4)
Published On Apr 20th 2015
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I wanted to scream.I closed my eyes.When I opened them I was near my room.I saw another room I knew it was of the girl I met in the ground.The door opened itself.Oh Allah Almighty please help me!I said and went inside. I heard crying sound from under a bed.I tried to look and I saw a dead body of a women. I screamed loudly and was just about to run when someone pulled my hair.Help me! I screamed. I quickly ran to the stairs. I saw a woman there why are you trying to kill me? What did I ever do to you? I saw a woman, a teacher perhaps going to that room. A little girl came, she was a student I guess. There is someone in my room. Who is it? The teacher asked and went inside the room.
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Aden Thanks Berha I know I can improve Aden
Jun 13th 2017
 
 
Berha ... can't say anything ... I'm not saying it's bad, it's good but I really am not scared so I feel there should be more detail, and some SPAG mistakes... Really it is not bad it is actually amazing but there's always room for improvement Berha
Jun 4th 2017
 
 
Fatima Intersting Fatima
May 13th 2017
 
 
Wania Good Wania
Sep 22nd 2015
 
 
Saqifa What mean of ''in in'' in your story title? Saqifa
Sep 20th 2015
 
 
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May 29th 2015
 
 
Fatima Great story Fatima
Apr 22nd 2015
 
 

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