Once upon a time, there was a girl name "Samara" who lived in K.S.A, Dammam. She used to study in Al-Majd International School. She had a nice friend and her name was "Sarah." And Samara was new to school and Sarah was old to school, since Samara came to school Sarah was jealous of Samara because she was good in studies, sports, manner wise, etc.
Once Sarah invited Samara at her house to stay, they both enjoyed a lot. The reason to bring Samara was "To kill her", after a long time Samara slept and Sarah woke up, brought the knife from kitchen and came slowly towards Samara. Suddenly,
Samara felt that someone is near to her so she opened her eyes and saw Sarah. Samara asked:"What are you doing? Why is there knife at your hand?"Sarah didn't replied and cut her body into 2 pieces. Later days Samara's mum asked Sarah:"Where is Samara??"Sarah replied:"I don't know and she went home at 10 am."Sarah told lie to Samara's mother. Later the Teacher asked the students "Does anyone knows, where Samara is? And why is she not coming?" Nobody replied.
Later at night Sarah was doing her homework she felt that someone is calling her name but no one was calling. After doing home work and eating Dinner Sarah was watching T.V and she saw Samara at T.V she suddenly switched off the T.V and walked towards her room suddenly she heard that someone switched on the T.V, she went to the lounge, she went to switch off suddenly Samara came out of the T.V and killed Sarah.
This is good creativity, but I seriously doubt that a girl in College wud do something THIS bad Just coz of jealousy. Sounds a bit far-fetched. Try writing what happens in real life. That would attract the reader to read more! And the ending was not clear, it shud have been a realistic ending, like Sarah owning up and admitting that she killed Samarah, something like that.
Don't mind, please, just trying to improve ur story;)