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Ahmad  Akhtar
Ahmad Akhtar
Silver Oaks School System Gulraiz Rawalpindi
The Legendary Keystones
Published On Dec 22nd 2013
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December 2013

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Ali, Rafay, and Immad were three friends. One day as they were walking on the beach they saw a bottle floating in the sea. They swam to the bottle and grabbed it. After coming to land they opened the bottle and they found a map. They couldn’t understand its wordings so they went to a wise old man who told them that it was a map to find Keystones.  First they were confused but then Rafay spoke up, “keystones, you mean the keystones of legend”. “I think so” said the wise old man. He also told them that only true friendship can control the keystones.
The keystones of legend were made by 3 friends and it gave them so much power that nothing could separate them. The legend also says that before they died they hid the keystones in the forest of Traps. Many brave young men had tried to find the keystones but none came back.  Ali, Rafay, and Immad discussed the map for a while and then decided that they would find the keystones of legend.
They packed everything they needed and began their journey. The map led them to a lake that was spread across the forest of Traps. They found a boat and started moving towards the north as indicated by the map.  Suddenly some crocodiles started following their boat. Ali managed to scare them away by a sharp old looking piece of wood. Now they rowed even faster to get to land and got there.
While they were walking Rafay got himself trapped into a net.  Immad had brought some sharp knives with him so he and Ali got him out by cutting the net. As they started walking on a way covered with leaves they fell into a hole. “Now what do we do?” asked Immad. “Wait I have a plan.” Said Rafay and took out a rope with a small anchor and threw it. .After three attempts the rope managed to find a support outside and they all got out of the hole.
They were too tired but still kept following the map after taking a little food. They came to some old looking ruins. They went in there and they found three paths. They didn’t knew which was the right one but they saw some wordings on each of the paths. The first path said “the one who follows this path would get what old men wish for”, the second said “the one who follows this path would have wealth but no respect and the third path said “the one who follows this path would be legend and no one alone can walk the path. The one who can walk the path would be the one who can pass a test on their right”. They looked to their right and found a training facility over there.
They passed it getting injured. At the end of the facility they found 3 gloves magically appear. They took those and followed the third path. The path led to the keystones but there was something else. They had to fight a dragon. They tried to fight it one by one but it was very strong for them but then the three friends made an attack together and killed the dragon.
Each of them took one keystone and put them on their gloves. It was amazing. Immad could control thunder and Rafay could command ice and Ali had all the powers of all the super heroes you know like superman. Back home they became kings of three great countries and they ruled wisely till they died but they hid those stones in desert of doom. The legend says that the one who finds the keystones from the desert of doom would have so much power that he could rule over two continents. 


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Comments 29
Umair Tahts amzng Umair
Jan 9th 2015
muhammad saad This story can be turned into a short novel! Muhammad Saad
Jan 5th 2015 Congragulations
Jun 5th 2014
Tooba Congrats and nice Tooba
Apr 22nd 2014
Ibrahim Congratulation for winning........ Ibrahim
Mar 2nd 2014
Feb 16th 2014
mathilda Good one :D keep it up :) Mathilda
Jan 31st 2014
Ahmad Thanks for the gift vshine team Ahmad
Jan 30th 2014
Ahmad Thanks for the gift vshine team Ahmad
Jan 30th 2014
Ahmad No hibba. my school campus is gulraiz and hers could be sadar or firdousi road Ahmad
Jan 24th 2014
hibba Do u knw fakiha naveed in class 8th in the same school as urs??? Hibba
Jan 24th 2014
hibba What was it then??? Hibba
Jan 24th 2014
Ahmad Vshine team! I haven't received the gift hamper even after 20 days. :( Ahmad
Jan 24th 2014
Affan Nice story Affan
Jan 23rd 2014
Ahmad Yes hibba i got it Ahmad
Jan 18th 2014
yashal Good try!! Yashal
Jan 14th 2014
InNoXent Excellent Innoxent
Jan 14th 2014
hibba Hay did u get gift hamper??? Hibba
Jan 13th 2014
Hiba Congratz Hiba
Jan 12th 2014
KHAN Awesome Khan
Jan 9th 2014
Soha Nice Soha
Jan 9th 2014
Soha Nice Soha
Jan 9th 2014
Hadia Goooooooooooooood Hadia
Jan 5th 2014
hibba Hey so u got a gift hamper??? good job Hibba
Jan 5th 2014
hibba Hey... nice effort i like ur story keep it up !!! Hibba
Jan 5th 2014
Sabtain Superb, keep it up............................... Sabtain
Dec 30th 2014
Ibrahim Nice dear,good try....... Ibrahim
Dec 30th 2014
Ayesha Good try. But looks like you're rushing the story. But still, the idea of the story is great. If you would stretch the story, it would be an awesome story! Ayesha
Dec 29th 2013
Ahmad My first adventurous story is on vshine. this is great Ahmad
Dec 28th 2013

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