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Bismah Shakir
Bismah Shakir
Beaconhouse School System Palm Tree Campus
Always Obey Your Mother
Published On Aug 4th 2013
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Always obey your mother
Once upon a time there was a boy lived near a forest. His name was Egeus. As he was not so like in the study so his mother always use to say him to study but he used to ignore his mother. Whenever he obeyed her he used to get full marks in test and exams. But when he didn’t obey her mother he failed or get bad marks from which he used to be ashamed in his class and because of this no one wants to be his friend and he always use to be alone his class and in his free time. From this we can say that always obey your mothers.
One day Egeus was playing his favourite game and was on the last level of that game and is mother called him to eat the dinner but he refused to eat and his mother said that she is not going to give him dinner to eat afterwards and he agreed and replied that he is also not going to eat the dinner afterwards. He didn’t use to obey his mother so he loosed his level. So he decided to eat the dinner first because now he has to start the game from the first level. When he came outside and sat for the dinner his mother said, “Why are you here now? You’re not going to eat the dinner.” He replied that “I loosed the level because I didn’t obeyed you I’m really sorry” From this we can say that always obey your mothers.
After a week in the evening Egeus said to his mom that he is going to the forest with his friends. His mom said that don’t go you might be lost but he ignored and went. When they reached the forest they enjoyed very much but as the night arrived they forget their way. So they decided to stay that night over there and they found a place and slept. Next morning when they woke up they still didn’t know their way back to home. During that situation they saw a bird singing a beautiful song and it also looks pretty. They decided to follow it and they did that. By following that bird they reached a house made up of cupcakes, sweets and chocolates. At that time they were very hungry so they started to eat that things from which the house was made. When 6they were eating suddenly a lady came from the window she cannot see so she used to see with her glass which she uses to hang around her neck. She welcomed Egeus and his friends and they went inside. She gave them good food to eat and a place to sleep and they slept. When Egeus slept the lady came in the room and watched the children and went in her room. The friends of Egeus were following that lady and by following her they reached a room in which they saw that the lady was a witch. They were very surprised to see that. When they were looking the witch suddenly looked at them and they were nervous that what to say. The witch made them her servants and kidnapped Egeus. She decided to eat him when he will be fat. But he was not becoming fat so she said that she is going to eat him right now. After that when she was going to put Egeus in the oven luckily her magic stick was in the control of his friends so they operate it and changed the positions of Egeus and that witch and they put that witch into oven and it ruined. So they ran and outside their parents were standing and they ran and said sorry to their parents and promised that they are always going to obey their parents. From this we can say that always obey your mothers.

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Comments 63
Bismah But why u think that i am joking, Ayesha? Bismah
May 15th 2015
 
 
Ayesha Hey!are you joking i dont think so your in class 7. Ha ha ha Ayesha
Feb 3rd 2015
 
 
Ayesha Hey!are you joking i dont think so your in class 7. Ha ha ha Ayesha
Feb 3rd 2015
 
 
Bismah Thanks Munibah Bismah
Feb 3rd 2015
 
 
munibah Hi Bismah my name is Munibah. You have written a great story:) Munibah
Jan 4th 2015
 
 
munibah Hi Bismah my name is Munibah. You have written a great story:) Munibah
Jan 4th 2015
 
 
AINA Advance Eid Mubarak Aina
Oct 4th 2014
 
 
Bismah Its ok!! Bismah
Oct 3rd 2014
 
 
shehram LOl!!! yhan koi grammar test ho rha hai menay bhi participate krna hai plz SOHA!! Shehram
Aug 25th 2014
 
 
Bismah How are u wafa? Bismah
Aug 20th 2014
 
 
Bismah Ya absolutely wafa Bismah
Jul 23rd 2014
 
 
wafa Bismah u can talk wid me Wafa
Jul 23rd 2014
 
 
princess Silly mistakes Cool Princess
Mar 15th 2014
 
 
Bismah I know i made it by myself Bismah
Mar 1st 2014
 
 
Zainab Really ajwa Zainab
Jan 11th 2014
 
 
Tooba U hav taken it from hansel and gretel but nice.u said he didn had any frends and when u started the scene of the forest u wrote that he said 2 his mother that i am going with my frends 2 the forest but plz do not mind cuz i dont want 2 fight with u but it is very very very very very nice keep it up Tooba
Dec 9th 2013
 
 
Bismah I know there are many mistakes Bismah
Nov 14th 2013
 
 
ajwa Zainab...u r totally polite!!! Ajwa
Oct 12th 2013
 
 
Zainab Oho doesn't matter if you make a mistake while writing. choti si baat he. kon sa aap us ka grammar test le rahi ho Zainab
Sep 28th 2013
 
 
Bismah Introduced my self in about me in my screen so you can see from that....... Bismah
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Soha Hey, Hafsa, advice tab diya karo jab apne comment ko post karne se pehle dekh liya karo. What is GRAMMER? It's actually GRAMMAR. Soha
Sep 7th 2013
 
 
Hamza Waqas WE ARE WITH RABIA AND WILL BE WITH RABIA UNTILL DR.MUHAMMAD.MURSI WILL BE THE PRESIDENT OF EGYPT!!! Hamza Waqas
Aug 26th 2013
 
 
HAFSA Moral was nice. but lack of grammer. and khadijah and ayesha you are right.and it is a bit from hansel and gretel but still i loved the story veryyyyyy much:)GOOD JOB bismah Hafsa
Aug 25th 2013
 
 
Soha Thnx and Bismah where are you? Soha
Aug 22nd 2013
 
 
eesha Yeah i agree Minahil :) Eesha
Aug 22nd 2013
 
 
wafa i thinkxxx thatxx itxx enoughxx fors bishmah to writexx by her ownself Wafa
Aug 22nd 2013
 
 
Minahil Wow nice advice by soha:) Minahil
Aug 21st 2013
 
 
Soha Yes, Bismah kindly introduce yourself! Soha
Aug 16th 2013
 
 
aysha Nice but u repeated so many words and there were some grammer mistakes Aysha
Aug 16th 2013
 
 
aysha Nice but u repeated so many words and there were some grammer mistakes Aysha
Aug 16th 2013
 
 
Nimra Heyya bismah as u r my new friend..!! :)) so if u dont mind so u can introduce ur self 2 me?? well i can ask u a question..?? :) Nimra
Aug 15th 2013
 
 
eesha Soha a good point... Eesha
Aug 15th 2013
 
 
tehreem HAPPY INDEPENDENCE DAY....... Tehreem
Aug 14th 2013
 
 
Bismah Soha please send me friend request Bismah
Aug 13th 2013
 
 
Khadijah Mashallah i thought this story was Hansel and Gretel Khadijah
Aug 13th 2013
 
 
Soha Hey... A bit from Hansel and Gretel... And Bismah, I just want to give you a suggestion... Plz try not to write so many things in just one sentence. You can write as many sentences as you want (but not useless). I hope you'll sort out it in your story but for an example, here is a sentence: One day Egeus was playing his favourite game and was on the last level of that game and is mother called him to eat the dinner but he refused to eat and his mother said that she is not going to give him dinner to eat afterwards and he agreed and replied that he is also not going to eat the dinner afterwards. And as for moral, it was nice. Soha
Aug 13th 2013
 
 
Rafia Thnxx Ajwa dear :) Rafia
Aug 12th 2013
 
 
Ajwa Thnxxx raffia !!!! nd no need ov sorry.....ppl make mstakes...!!!=) Ajwa
Aug 12th 2013
 
 
Kainat Niceeee Kainat
Aug 12th 2013
 
 
Soha Good!!!!!!!!! keep it up! Soha
Aug 12th 2013
 
 
Rafia Same to u api and everyone :) Rafia
Aug 12th 2013
 
 
unaiza Lack of grammer but a nice start!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Unaiza
Aug 10th 2013
 
 
rabia Eid mubarak everyone :D Rabia
Aug 10th 2013
 
 
Rafia Em really sorry....... Ajwa by mistake i wrote Bismah :( em really shooo shorry dear :) Rafia
Aug 8th 2013
 
 
Rafia A0A!!!!! Bismah ..... why would I mind dear :) u can ask anything as now we r good frnds :) so well I live in Karachi !!!... Rafia
Aug 7th 2013
 
 
Allama Inaam Beta ye kahani achi hai lekin ap mazeed koshishn karti rahin... Allama Inaam
Aug 6th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Great Maarij Maqsood
Aug 6th 2013
 
 
Ajwa @raffia...wd u mind if I asked u where u live????just askin' ya as a frnd....kay....=] Ajwa
Aug 6th 2013
 
 
Rafia Bismah.............. I loved it nd ur welcome my frnd :) Rafia
Aug 6th 2013
 
 
Urwa Quite some grammar mistakes but nice.. Urwa
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Rafia Welcome :) Rafia
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Rafia Really nyc:) Rafia
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Ajwa Faboo... Ajwa
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
tehreem Good 1.. Tehreem
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
rabia Bismah you wrote fantastic.......... Rabia
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
eesha Ohhhhh no bismah dont think lyk that i am hitting lyk ....:) :) it was a nyc story w8 a nyc moral Eesha
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Bismah Is it was that bad that no one is liking it Bismah
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Bismah Thanxxxxxx Bismah
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
Rafia Yup!!!!!!! u r right Eesha................ but anyways it's lovely:) Rafia
Aug 4th 2013
 
 
Bismah Yap its little bit from Hansel and Gretel Bismah
Aug 4th 2013
 
 
Bassam Good stories Bassam
Aug 4th 2013
 
 
eesha Some of it is from Hansel n Gretel ..........but nyc try... Eesha
Aug 4th 2013
 
 
Marwa It's the one it is heard but from different concept but it's nice Marwa
Aug 4th 2013
 
 

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