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Abdur Rafay Khan
Abdur Rafay Khan
Beaconhouse School System Pechs Campus,karachi
The Mystery Of The Coldblooded Killer (final Part)
Published On Jun 20th 2013
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Stephen continued, "Sean Anderson is money lender and charges high interest rates on his loans. When our witness, Peter Balkov told us that he and David Erasmus were arguing so I deduced that the argument must have been on this loan. I think that Sean must have been threatening David to give back his loan. But since the amount must have been a large one so David must have been trying to persuade Sean to give him some more time to pay off the loan. When I met Sean he had orange hair so I figured out he might be the right suspect."
"But what about the fact that the killer is left handed?" asked Colonel Jefferson.
"Simple. I saw that Sean was wearing his wrist watch on his right hand. Also he did most of his work with his left hand."  Explained Stephen.
"I think it's time we arrest him. He's such a coldblooded person!" said Morris.
"Of course but first I must disguise myself again as 'Dr. Joe Rollins'" said Stephen. Then the police, the detectives and Chris Stephen arrived at Sean Anderson's house. Stephen told the others to stay outside and wait for his command. When Stephen pushed the door, it was open. Stephen walked inside and Sean was surprised to see him.
"Doctor how did you come in?" asked Sean.
"The door was open," said Stephen.
"Oh I forgot. But why did you come at such a late hour of night?"
"I've come here to arrest you."
What?!Are you alright Dr. Joe?" asked Sean.
"You killed David Erasmus with a pocket knife at the Wonderland Park. You bought that knife from Johnson's and Co. Am I right?" said Stephen.
"How...how do you know so much about me? Who are you?" asked Sean.
"I'm detective Christopher Stephen," said Stephen, "officers please come in." At that moment police cops came in and arrested Sean. Sean tried to deny that he was the killer but when Stephen showed him the evidence he became cold and yelled like a maniac, "I shall get my revenge on you Stephen!"
"You ruthless, heartless person! You should be ashamed of yourself. Take him away!" shouted John Holmes.
"Chris we are proud of you. You once again solved a terrible murder. I'm impressed!" said Colonel Jefferson.
"I was able to do it because we worked as team. Without your help I could not have finished this case!" smiled Stephen.
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Comments 47
Nuzhat Your stories are endless and please post some more and accept my request Nuzhat
Nov 21st 2013
 
 
Soha Marvellous........................:) Soha
Aug 22nd 2013
 
 
Taha Awesome...........................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Taha
Aug 18th 2013
 
 
Uswah Rafay these detective stories are awesome and perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And stephen basically defines you 'cuz alot of minds are requiredto write such proof-having stories keep it up! And please keep on sending more THE CASE OF....... stories ;) Uswah
Jul 13th 2013
 
 
Maha K.... Any Ideas Abt an English Writer? Maha
Jul 12th 2013
 
 
Khadijah Ishtiaq Ahmad has some of his stories in Urdu magazine Sathe. Khadijah
Jul 10th 2013
 
 
 яυмαιsα BtW ur Stories r lik soooooo super awsum.....!!!!! яυмαιsα
Jul 9th 2013
 
 
 яυмαιsα Some people on vshine have grrrrr8 talent(Fatima, Abdur Rafay, Noor and many more)....and i m not 1 of em':( яυмαιsα
Jul 9th 2013
 
 
Arwa Hasfa u read his novel " Gaar kaa samandar" ??? Arwa
Jul 9th 2013
 
 
Arwa Oh! nice hafsa im also biggg fan of ishtiaq Ahmed's novels Arwa
Jul 9th 2013
 
 
Hafsa Yes he writes inspector jamshed series inspector kamran mirza series and shoki brother series. Hafsa
Jul 7th 2013
 
 
Maha He is an urdu writer right? Maha
Jul 6th 2013
 
 
Hafsa You don't know ishtiaq ahmed??????????????.he is my favorite writer. very nice story. Hafsa
Jul 6th 2013
 
 
Maha K.. Maha
Jul 5th 2013
 
 
Arwa Yes Maha Arwa
Jul 4th 2013
 
 
Maha Who is Ishtiaq Ahmed? Is he a Writer? Maha
Jul 4th 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay I read novels of sherlock holmes more than ishtiaq ahmed[but don't think i copy them!!] Abdur Rafay
Jul 4th 2013
 
 
Arwa Oh! nice i also like detective stories :) and u read novels of Ishtiaq Ahmed?? Arwa
Jul 4th 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Yes....especially detective stories Abdur Rafay
Jun 28th 2013
 
 
manal U love mystery stories don't u??? Manal
Jun 26th 2013
 
 
manal U love mystery stories don't u??? Manal
Jun 26th 2013
 
 
Rafia Awesome Rafay....you are going to b the winner....INSHA ALLAH! Rafia
Jun 26th 2013
 
 
Sana This story HAS to make it in the magazine! Sana
Jun 26th 2013
 
 
rabia SO mAKE oNE pLAN......!!!!!!:) Rabia
Jun 25th 2013
 
 
Ahmed Awesome. i think it would get published in mag!! Ahmed
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
Usman Awesome Story!!!!! Usman
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Don't wait.......i've no plan 4 a story right now......... Abdur Rafay
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
rabia That's brillliant .......gr8.... Waiting 4 next one...impatiently!!!:) Rabia
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
Andlib Nice.. Andlib
Jun 22nd 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!! Abdur Rafay
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
rizwan Awesome...............!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Rizwan
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Minahil Alaaaaaaaaaaaaa :) Minahil
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Nazish thanx for appreciating my story again and again~~~ Abdur Rafay
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay No plan right now.....I don't have any ideas!! Abdur Rafay
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
eesha Nyc story.Keep it up!!!!!it certainely was mysterious.I first thought that the killer might be Peter Balcov himself when the killer was asumed to be left handed. Eesha
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Sana When are u sending the next story? Waiting...... Sana
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Ummm......khadija its a sentence used by a criminal in anger but i don't think i will write a stiry like this.... but btw thanx every 1 ........ I couldn't believe that so many people like my detective stories!! Abdur Rafay
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
nazish Amazing rafay.the story contains mystery,adventure and suspect.this story was the best i had ever read.you are da best. Nazish
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
Aisha A terrific story!!!Bravo..... Aisha
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
 яυмαιsα SOWWWYYYYYY Abdur rafay 4 saying dat cartoons/anime drawing is forbidden.......cuz i love naruto and fmab and cant stopo drawing/sketchin' them everyyyyyyyyyyyyywhere!!! яυмαιsα
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay Plz send ur story soon!! Abdur Rafay
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Shehryar it is a story like in most of the mystery novels and so , but still you have done great job writing the story yourself i enjoyed it Shehryar
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Sana Nyc.......send another story soon! Sana
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Khadijah Does this sentence "I shall get my revenge on you Stephen!" mean that the next heading will be 'Mystery of Stephen in danger' ???????????? Khadijah
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Muhammad Arham Superb story my friend !!! KEEP IT UP And better be ready for my next story.... coming soon. Muhammad Arham
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Abdur Rafay I swear to Allah .........I've written it myself! Abdur Rafay
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Shehryar Have you written this by yourself????? Shehryar
Jun 20th 2013
 
 

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