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Sana Raheel
Sana Raheel
Pakistan International School, Riyadh
The Magic Pencil
Published On May 29th 2013
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Hi every one! I wanted to send the last part of my story the brave girl but it is not being accepted. (We apologize for delay: admin VShineworld.com) So I am making a new account and sending all of my stories in it without parts.
 
The Magic Pencil
Aliza sighed. 'Did all of this have to happen with me?' The last few days had been very rough for her. She remembered her Birthday, which was one week ago. She had been very happy, she, as the daughter of a billionaire, wanted something very special. Her parents had gone at noon to get her gifts. After almost one hour, the phone rang. The maid answered it. After talking for two minutes, she came to Aliza and, her voice breaking, told Aliza that her parents had died in a car accident. Aliza started crying. After her parents’ burial, she thought of what to do. With her parents' advisors help, she decided to start school because parents wanted her to be well educated. She decided to study in her old school, from grade 8. Aliza looked forward to her day. It was her first day in her school. She tried to concentrate but could not because she missed her parents a lot. She was always alone in her thoughts. Her friend had told all of her teachers about what she had gone through. So her teachers did not scold her because they understood that she was passing through hard times. When she came home she cried a lot because at home time everyone’s parents came to pick their children and she went alone through a driver. She went to her parent’s room and looked through her parents stuff. She saw a big locker. Aliza opened it through a knife. And found a pencil. She wondered why it was given a lot of security. She didn’t use it at all because she thought it was a special thing because it was given a lot of security.  In the night she dreamed that her parents were drawing with the pencil. So after school the next day, she drew flowers with that pencil. She looked around and saw again on the page and the flower was real. She thought that the flower came through the wind. So she experimented with the pencil again. It happened again. She was very excited to tell the pencils magic to her friend. She told her friend about it but she said that she was dreaming. Weeks later, Aliza concentrated a little more. But, sadly her friend left the city. Aliza grew sad and her history teacher was changed. He had a daughter of Aliza’s age. She was intelligent but Aliza was better in studies. The teacher knew that if Aliza concentrated hard, she will be better in studies than his daughter. So he started thinking of a way to make his daughter the top student of class. As he taught history, which is very boring, Aliza started drawing her pencil case (with the magic pencil) which she forgot in her home. The new teacher was very strict and took the pencil from Aliza. She was very unhappy as she knew that he won’t give it back. After school that day, Aliza went to the staff room and asked the teacher for her pencil. The sir hated Aliza, and told her that she won’t get it back. Aliza pleaded that it was her dead parent's pencil but the sir didn’t listen. She then, by mistake told him that it was a magic pencil. The sir, astonished told her to give proof. Aliza asked him what to draw. The sir told her that the next day he'll think of something for her to draw.
Aliza agreed and went home. Meanwhile, the sir knew that Aliza was not lying because she was very truthful. He thought that if he could think of something for her to draw or write that will get her in trouble; he will get his daughter as the most intelligent girl in school. He still had the pencil with himself. So he drew some coins to check if it was really magical. It was. So, he wrote: Aliza will be accused as a big criminal and will be sent to jail. The next day it happened so. The queen’s jewellery was missing and was found in Aliza’s home. All of the maids and servants were already fired. Aliza lived there alone and was sent to jail. The pencil could only stay with its rightful owner. So, the next day, it was with Aliza, in jail.
After Aliza was taken to prison, she cried a lot. In the night she thought that she had passed through so many tough times and now --- another one!? It was just too much.
She sobbed even more loudly as she remembered her trial which had happened before she entered prison. She remembered as the judge said: 'All evidence is proved against you. You shall now live in prison for thirty five years.' And she had felt dizzy and fainted. Then she was taken to the prison hospital and had gained consciousness in prison. She was sobbing and had fallen asleep.
In the morning, she woke up and had a strange feeling that something good will happen to her. But then she remembered that she was in prison and was in there for thirty five years. She felt like crying but as she was going to, a girl (who was also in prison) noticed the tears in her eyes. She, instead of comforting her, said to everyone: here she goes again! She’s going to start her crying again! Aliza turned her face to a wall and started to cry.
In the night, she felt that something was under her blanket. She saw that it was. Her pencil! She was very happy and, as the guard was sleeping, she drew the key to her prison and opened the lock and left the key. (She could have changed time if she knew that anything that is written by the pencil will also come true. The sir had written by the pencil I wish that Aliza will go to jail. And so it had happened*)
She went to a forest. She wanted to know the time so she drew a watch and came to know that it was 7 in the evening. She was really hungry. She ate some food and wanted shelter. She saw a hut in the distance. It was looking very old and deserted. So Aliza decided to spend the night there. Aliza entered the hut and was surprised to see an old woman with a kind face. She told Aliza that she was a witch. Aliza was feeling scared when she said: don’t be scared I am a good witch.
 
She studied her and told her some things about the pencil and a thing about her birth. She came to know that the pencil was created by a very powerful wizard. And that if you break the pencil, everything made or written by it will disappear or will not happen. She was about to break the pencil when the police officers came to the hut. She drew a door and ran out. There were some police officers and a lot of people over there. She took the pencil and broke it. She disappeared.
All the people who witnessed this were surprised... WHAT HAPPENED???
Her friend, who had left the school, was back to the city to meet Aliza. She witnessed Aliza breaking the pencil and was totally puzzled. She thought that she might have left some letter or something explaining this. There she found a drawing. She saw the ghost of Aliza standing in front of her. She was puzzled. The ghost spoke: My parents had a daughter who died when she was three years old. They found this pencil and drew another baby--- that was me. When I broke the pencil, everything created by it disappeared. So, I am also gone forever.
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Comments 39
Anam So sad...but awesome and congrats! Anam
Apr 17th 2015
 
 
areeqa Nop..! :) Areeqa
May 18th 2014
 
 
Sana U guys make me blush! Thanx for the wonderful comments!(^_^) Sana
Oct 5th 2013
 
 
wafa Woww!! Wafa
Aug 21st 2013
 
 
Marwa @Areeqa I totally agree with you and Sana that's an awesome story. It deserves to be a winner . CONGRATS Marwa
Jul 30th 2013
 
 
Areeba Oh Sana ur stories are simply AWESOME. They are the best Areeba
Jul 20th 2013
 
 
Fariba Very nice story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Fariba
Jul 12th 2013
 
 
Laibah I loved it and it was so well written.............. poor family Laibah
Jul 6th 2013
 
 
Uswah Sana u r the best storey writer i love to read ur stories i want to be ur frend! My name is uswah by the way! Uswah
Jul 4th 2013
 
 
Hiba Gr8....you write really well.... Hiba
Jun 29th 2013
 
 
Sana Thank you, thank you!!!!!! Sana
Jun 26th 2013
 
 
eesha Congratzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Eesha
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
Hoora Congratz because you are the winner and truly the story is awesome :D . Hoora
Jun 22nd 2013
 
 
eesha Really nice work done here.Keep it up!!!! Eesha
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA yes gee always truth is bitter Gullasht
Jun 19th 2013
 
 
Sana Thank you areeqa and l agree rizwan and Irfan, truth IS bitter. Bt not always... Sana
Jun 16th 2013
 
 
rizwan Yes Irfan is true......Truth is always bitter!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Rizwan
Jun 13th 2013
 
 
Fatima Whatever Fatima
Jun 9th 2013
 
 
irfan True is always bitter Irfan
Jun 7th 2013
 
 
areeqa Very nice its an awesome story sana i love it! n dont care about others they all r habitual of posting such bad comments cz they r dumb! n congrats to be the winner! :) Areeqa
Jun 7th 2013
 
 
Sana Salwa and eman thanx ebad tell me what's wrong with the story and salwa no one iz fighting Sana
Jun 7th 2013
 
 
Salwa Hey hey heyy...guyz stop fighting..!! well congratss Salwa
Jun 7th 2013
 
 
Ebad Bekar,fazool hai Ebad
Jun 6th 2013
 
 
Fatima TEHREEM! when are you going to change that DUMB picture????? Fatima
Jun 6th 2013
 
 
tehreem EMAN..WHEN DID U JOIN VSHINE,, Tehreem
Jun 5th 2013
 
 
Iman Sana its such a nice story + congratzzzz..... Iman
Jun 5th 2013
 
 
Sana @Rumaisa cuz there iz no proper law in that place Sana
Jun 5th 2013
 
 
Sana And thanx to every 1 hurraiya, marij, rabia, rumaisa, and tehreem Sana
Jun 5th 2013
 
 
Sana @Saad do tell me what do u find soooooooo 'bekaar' in the story. tell me so i can improve it.........;) Sana
Jun 5th 2013
 
 
 яυмαιsα Ummm..........8 grade girls DO NOT GO 2 JaIL....................soo why id Aliza go!!!! яυмαιsα
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
Saad Bekar Saad
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
hurriya Hey sana! i love your story.you deserve to be a winner and keep it up.. Hurriya
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
rabia Nice Rabia
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Nice Maarij Maqsood
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
tehreem CONGRATZXX..SANA .U R THE WINNER OF MY PAGE.. Tehreem
Jun 4th 2013
 
 
Sana Thank you tehreem and menahil Sana
Jun 3rd 2013
 
 
tehreem Cool.. Tehreem
Jun 1st 2013
 
 
Minahil Yeah I did Good work Minahil
May 31st 2013
 
 
Sana Did anyone notice????? Admin added his/her own comment!!!!!!!!! Sana
May 31st 2013
 
 

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