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Minahil Bakhtawar
Minahil Bakhtawar
The City School
Hidden Door In My Room
Published On May 14th 2013
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"Could you open this box mum" I asked mum when we were setting our new house. It had belonged to a scientist before but now it was ours.  While mum was opening the box I had a look around in my room and found a door a, hidden door.

I searched for the keys and found an ancient looking skeleton key. I tried it but as the door was locked and it wasn't the right key, the door didn't open. I searched and found a key with Hieroglyphics carvings on it, I tried in the key hole and the door opened. By this time mum was in the kitchen setting the shelves so without a second thought I sneaked into the door.

I had entered into another world. I was startled, amazed, surprised and to no extent flabbergasted. It was the Egyptian world. I quickly realised that I was in1460 BC when more than 80 pyramids were built across the River Nile. A soldier came and grabbed me, I was a stranger to them and strangers weren't allowed inside the city gates. He took me to the Pharaoh; he ordered me in the prison for lifetime I started to weep and ran away. I found the door and came out and the soldiers kept looking for me. I could see them but they couldn't see me. I closed the door and decided not to open it. I don't think it was a dream, do you?

 

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Shaheer Hey minahil ! if u dont mind then your story was no better than gullshat (dr. or not) and thats that Shaheer
May 18th 2015
 
 
Minahil Quetta is amazing i love it :-) Minahil
May 31st 2014
 
 
Gullasht AOA minahil quetta ahh gahi soo0, kesa laga moon se km haana :) Gullasht
Apr 29th 2014
 
 
KHAN Its nicely written. Khan
Feb 7th 2014
 
 
Minahil Yes i have just read it twice>>>Its just about average and not as good as v shine:) Minahil
Oct 30th 2013
 
 
sana Have you read smash magazine minahil ? Sana
Oct 26th 2013
 
 
Minahil Ok i'll call u wen i ll b free Minahil
Sep 27th 2013
 
 
wafa Dear MINAHIL CALL ME I'M WATIN Wafa
Sep 23rd 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil that's fine.u have 2 talk wid me on my poem.i also talk wid u on your story Wafa
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
Minahil Thnx anam and whats on Wafa??:-) Minahil
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
wafa Don't u cmnt what happen 2 u???? Wafa
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
Anam Awwsome because it wasn't reality still it's great! Anam
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
wafa And dear minahil if u want to talk wid me u can talk wid me on my poem.sometimes i will cmnt and sometimes u Wafa
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
wafa Miahil i aslso see charlie and chocolate factory.The movie awesomw.AND,DEAR i am going tell you on my poem wherever u r.new on wafa Wafa
Sep 12th 2013
 
 
Minahil Very nice minahil sometimes think that the strangest thing is we are both minahil Minahil
Sep 12th 2013
 
 
Minahil Ok i'll try to read young nation>Matilda is a fiction novewl written by Roald Dahl(writer of Charlie and the chocolate factory) Matilda is about a small extra genius girl:The plot is amazing and you must read it>It is awesome:} Minahil
Sep 12th 2013
 
 
wafa Dear can u tell me what is matilda? Wafa
Sep 11th 2013
 
 
wafa Miahil i'm ver busy now these days.you also have to work hard and i also.dear plz i used to sau that u have to read youngnation magazine.that magzine is awesome foe me.We also write stories,articles,poems,and everthing.and i want to say that dear plz read that magzine that is only for childs. Wafa
Sep 11th 2013
 
 
Minahil I reach home from school at 3 first i offer Zuhr prayer,then i have my lunch.I change my clothes and go to sleep at 3:30,I wake up at 5:30.I offer Asr and do my homework ,,Then i go out to the park for 10 to 15 minutes,Then i watch tv ,Have dinner at 8:45 and prepare my things for school the next say like pressing the uniform ,Then i drink milk,And watch sum more tv(though mama doesnt allow:)then go to sleep at 11:} Minahil
Sep 10th 2013
 
 
wafa What is ur rotine now can u explain me??? i am very busy now these days too much busy that i forget to eat my lunch at home not in scool.Yaar what can i do???cuz i have 10 subjects to stude...I have alot work to do??and i also have no entrertainment whole day// my father say me that u r so hardworking but actually i think i'm not.i started from 8'oo clock and take rest at 11o'clock 4 just 5 minutes and again syudy and then i free at 8'oo pm Wafa
Sep 5th 2013
 
 
wafa Ig yeah sure... minahil plz pray 4 me 2 i want to top the board dear plz i'll will also pray 4 mw Wafa
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Minahil Mine has also started on 2nd:-) Minahil
Sep 2nd 2013
 
 
wafa My school is starting from 2nd of sep:-) Wafa
Aug 31st 2013
 
 
Minahil My v shine was also not opening in the past few days i think the website was being upgraded:}When is ur school staarting>>?????? Minahil
Aug 31st 2013
 
 
wafa I don't cmnt cuz vshine was not opening today i see it open Wafa
Aug 30th 2013
 
 
Minahil Yo are right i will get busy when my school will open on 28th aug' and i was just about to ask whather izza waheed is your sis ;0Thanx for telling Minahil
Aug 24th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil don't want to cmnt me' 0 Wafa
Aug 23rd 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil don't want to cmnt me' 0 Wafa
Aug 23rd 2013
 
 
wafa Why you sorry mino.............i was sorry to say that why you say sorry.......i think you didn't see my comments okayyyy....izza is my sis as you know.....you didn't see....///// plz read her cmnt what she say about.. and,when is your school is gonna to be start.......i am going to school on monday or late..........and it's new school for me.....i will find new frendz or not what did you thinkkk?????????????it's better or not ....can you have an ideaaaa???????????i am very happpi to listen thet i am going school.....i think i didn't cmnt you when i starting my schoollll!!!!!!!!and i want to know that are you gonna to be busyyyyyyyyy.....and i think that homework,tests and school preparation takes alot time..........:-) Wafa
Aug 18th 2013
 
 
Minahil It rained cats and dogs in Quetta there were thunder storms and I enjoyed it a lot and I am sorry:-( Minahil
Aug 17th 2013
 
 
scientist Want to be my friend again can you tell me that rainy days in quetta it rained alot in sialkot i am also very busy Scientist
Aug 16th 2013
 
 
wafa Yaar why you late comment i think you are a buisness girl cuz os you send me late comment i don't like this Wafa
Aug 15th 2013
 
 
wafa Yeah of course how are you right now???????? Wafa
Aug 15th 2013
 
 
Minahil Oh i have aso thought the same when i visited these pgs:} Minahil
Aug 14th 2013
 
 
scientist HI MINAHIL I am wafa.I have three id's known as wafi,scientist girl,wafa Scientist
Aug 14th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil sorry for late but EID MUBARK AND ALSO INDEPENDNCE DAY. H ow are you right now :-p :-p:-p Wafa
Aug 14th 2013
 
 
Izza A0A...!!!!!!!!!!! Minahil, long time I've been lookin' at ur converxati0n wid wafa..(my sis)...u kn0w..em happi dat u both are tied in a g0od relati0n f Frnxhip...........n xorri but late Eid Mubk....& HaPpI iNdEpEnDeNcE DaY..!!! May ALLAH make ur em@@n xtr0ng..n may HE bless u wid all the happinex n succexx f da w0rld..(AMEEN SUM AMEEN) Izza
Aug 13th 2013
 
 
wafa Yes minahil sorry i didn't cmnt cuz i was bbusy with my cousins wheen you call eid mubarak!!!!!!!!! Wafa
Aug 11th 2013
 
 
Minahil Eid Mubarak friends Ramadan has ended I will miss the holy month Minahil
Aug 11th 2013
 
 
Minahil Is your phone fine now? Minahil
Aug 7th 2013
 
 
wafa Wyhen you call Wafa
Aug 6th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil hurry up Wafa
Aug 5th 2013
 
 
wafa Sorry minahil i also have a problem with my ptcl and i was worry that i didn't recieve you call now give me you ptcl number and tell when you call me.Don't say sorry i am you friend :-P Wafa
Aug 4th 2013
 
 
Minahil Sorry wafa i cannot call you there is some problem with my phone:( Minahil
Aug 3rd 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil can you give me your ptcl or cell number. Wafa
Aug 1st 2013
 
 
wafa So much THANKYOU OF YOU MINAHIL.AND DON'T FORGET TO NOTEDOWN MY NUMBER Wafa
Jul 31st 2013
 
 
wafa Thankyou minahil i will wait for your call Wafa
Jul 31st 2013
 
 
Minahil I''ll call you on third august at 5 pm Minahil
Jul 31st 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil hurryup Wafa
Jul 31st 2013
 
 
wafa Plz tell me time date and day Wafa
Jul 30th 2013
 
 
wafa My ptcl number is 052-4293500 Wafa
Jul 30th 2013
 
 
wafa Oh dear tell me when you call time,date,day Wafa
Jul 30th 2013
 
 
Minahil Oh yes wafa Minahil
Jul 29th 2013
 
 
wafa Can i give you my ptcl number Wafa
Jul 29th 2013
 
 
wafa Dear Minahil how are u? you can comment on my stuff by clicking on my screen wafi waheed i also use this id Wafa
Jul 26th 2013
 
 
Minahil Ramazan mubarak gullasht and wafa I wasnt having net connection for a long time>>Nice to read you r comments I will comment on your work wafi:)))) Minahil
Jul 23rd 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil what happen to you???? yaaarrr :-p Wafa
Jul 19th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil plz cmnt plz i request you yaar meri behan Wafa
Jul 16th 2013
 
 
wafa THANKOU DR.GULLASHAT API Wafa
Jul 13th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA why not??!!...... Dear wafa Gullasht
Jul 12th 2013
 
 
wafa Well i pray for you okay u also do this Wafa
Jul 12th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AsSalam.0.Alekuim!!... "RAMADAN MUBARAK" Dear @Minahil and Wafa May Allah give you courage you collect too much NAKIYA and May Allah Bless you in this mouth (AMEEN) keep remember me in your's prays. Gullasht
Jul 11th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AsSalam.0.Alekuim!!... "RAMADAN MUBARAK" Dear @Minahil and Wafa May Allah give you courage you collect too much NAKIYA and May Allah Bless you in this mouth (AMEEN) keep remember me in your's prays. Gullasht
Jul 11th 2013
 
 
Nimra Khair mubarak wafa and same 2 u.. :) and all my other friends.. :) Nimra
Jul 11th 2013
 
 
wafa HI MINAHIL DEAR FRIEND RAMADAN MUBARAK HO AAP ROZAY RAKHTI HO WISH YOU BEST OF LUCK Wafa
Jul 10th 2013
 
 
wafa Hi cmnt plz i cnt cmnt Wafa
Jul 10th 2013
 
 
wafa Why you don't comment on wafiwaheed Wafa
Jul 8th 2013
 
 
wafi HI MINAHIL YOU CAN ALSO SEE MY STUFF AND PLZ COMMENT ON IT.OK DO YOU AGREEEEEEEEEEEEEE Wafi
Jul 7th 2013
 
 
wafi HI MIINAHIL I AM WAFA MINO YOUR FRIEND I ALSO USE THIS ID. Wafi
Jul 7th 2013
 
 
Irum Yes, I kinda frgot abt u!! Irum
Jul 6th 2013
 
 
wafa Right now i am your sister!!!!!plz just comment me and talk!!!!!!!!! Wafa
Jul 2nd 2013
 
 
Minahil Wafa meri behan:) mein pindi gae thi So I couldn't open v shine I was with my cousins >>>>>>>>:) Minahil
Jul 2nd 2013
 
 
wafa What's matter?????????tell plz only me Wafa
Jul 1st 2013
 
 
wafa Don't you comment why?WHY?WHY?WHY? what's matter tell me openly ok mano Wafa
Jul 1st 2013
 
 
Minahil No Ayesha ......You appeared after a long time on my page:) Minahil
Jul 1st 2013
 
 
Irum Do u know khadijah osman in the 7th grade in ur school , minahil? Irum
Jul 1st 2013
 
 
Laibah This story is WAAAAAYY much better than your joke !!!!!!! Laibah
Jul 1st 2013
 
 
wafa I live in sialkot cantt punjab free with me!!!ohhh who are you? Wafa
Jun 29th 2013
 
 
Minahil Wafa she is my classmate and friend as welll>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>Ia m going to QUETTA now'''''''where do you live Minahil
Jun 29th 2013
 
 
wafa AOA MINAHIL!!!! How are you?i'm fine right now by the way where are you going now i also want to know.Dear!Who is essha?your classmate or friend tell Wafa
Jun 28th 2013
 
 
Minahil @mino:) Dear i don't have sisters I just have one naughty bro.I don't know Minahil . Minahil
Jun 25th 2013
 
 
eesha Can anyone tell me how to upload ur picture from computer??????????????????????plzzzzzzzz help me.I am new to this site Eesha
Jun 24th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil just tell me that you know minahil nayazee.How many sisters do you have? Wafa
Jun 24th 2013
 
 
eesha Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww i miss u toooooooooo :( I totally forgot that u were going to skardu.OHHHhhhhhhh i think i am getting jealous of u ;)I hope u enjoy alottttt aur yaaar kahan summer vacation task khatam howa.Done of ICT and urdu thora sa rehta hai baki wese ka wese hi para hoa hai:P Tum to mazay mein ho no summer vacation task for u..... Eesha
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
eesha Wooooow great name for mianwali "niazis' city" hahahahahahahahahahahaha.I couldn't stop laughing when u i saw it...................................I GIVE U A* AT THAT. Eesha
Jun 23rd 2013
 
 
Minahil @ EESHA:::::::::::::::::::Our house is almost packed Eesha"Right now we haven't gone to quetta.Just visiting relativesand missing you alot>WE will go to skardu in this month:)HOw are yyou by the way:Vacation task kia?:) Minahil
Jun 22nd 2013
 
 
Minahil HAHAHA:)rigt now i am in the city of niazis' .My exams were over so I had been busy in travelling>>>>>>>>>>>> Minahil
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
eesha Heyyyyyyyyyyyyyy minahil!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!at last i joined v shine.Nyc story written there.Btw r u still in mianwali or have u settled in quetta???????????Where r u nowadayzzzzzz??u don't reply me on gmail???????????????????????????? Eesha
Jun 21st 2013
 
 
wafa AOA!! How are you Minahil! I am fine.You must at to answer of my comment that where now you live?In which city?Do you know minahil nayazee live in sialkot cantt army area i think she posted in islamabad now.It's Ok.Why you say sorry?Instead you are my friend.And in which work you are busy now? Wafa
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
Minahil Sorry Wafa''''''''I was tooooooooooooo busy ,How are you?:P Minahil
Jun 20th 2013
 
 
wafa Aoa!! Minahil why are you not talking with me?Answer Wafa
Jun 18th 2013
 
 
wafa Bcoz i wrote in her sis story that oohhhh! Wafa
Jun 13th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA DEAR Wafa for what Linda afraid? Gullasht
Jun 10th 2013
 
 
wafa Dear Linda! Why are you afraid?I just use this word as joke.If you mind,then forgive me Wafa
Jun 9th 2013
 
 
Linda AOA waFa why you wrote OOoooooooohhhhhh!.....????? in my sister ID SSSstory (Ant in the castle). Linda
May 31st 2013
 
 
Linda Hey!.... Wafa you are soO, much intelegent i agree w8 you Agree Dear!....... but you can tell your age incorrect becuz Dear your age is may be 10 becuz i think you was 8 years in 2 class and then, you read 6 in 9 years soO, Dear now you are 10 years old Is i M correCt???????????!>>>>>>....... Linda
May 31st 2013
 
 
Nimra Yaa lida u r right... Nimra
May 31st 2013
 
 
wafa Dear Linda! i skip 3,4,5,7,8 and now in 9th.I am intelligent that my father skip my classes.It's not tough.I want to top board.Please!!!pray for me alot.In which class do you study and how old are you?Just!!! don't take tension! Wafa
May 31st 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil! my friend minahil nayazee's father is also in army.but now where you live.She live in sialkot khalid bin walid colony cantt.She is also 12 and now in 6th actually i skip 3,4,5,7,8 and now in 9th.GOOD JOB!!! when you didn't comment i mean that you don't want to be friend of me! but, my mother and also all my family members call me wafa my father wafo and my brother tuff.but,i say that my nick name is wafa mino but, now wafa mano . Wafa
May 31st 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA hey! Young Lady are you Mad that you can' t advice me you written bad comments on my story instead of writing me congratzzz or good o. K and if you think it contain mistakes soO, we have Vshine to improves our skills . Gullasht
May 31st 2013
 
 
Minahil By the way Dear Linda to make it clear let me tell you that you are in an enourmous confusion cause I haven't commented on any of your write ups_________________and Wafa in which school do you read my papers are going on so I was busy?How are you? Minahil
May 31st 2013
 
 
Minahil That actually wasn't for you Linda It was for Gullasht and if you think I was criticising you:you are confused young lady it was just an advice Surprised to see that someone can take an advice on heart! Minahil
May 31st 2013
 
 
Linda AOA FIRST OF all you written that you can't belive that i cOme in Quetta in this way that you wil be going to MoOn YaR!........ Minahil if my story contain tOo much grammer mistake soO, it does not approve and i can't win o.K and yeah! i live in quetta.I written all thiz 4rm my sister ID Linda
May 30th 2013
 
 
Linda Wafa you are liyer you just say in your precious coment that you are in 9th and then, you said that you 12 soO, how you coverup your course Dear tell me!.....................???????????? Linda
May 30th 2013
 
 
Minahil I am in The City School actually my father is in the arm forces so he is posted every Two to three years In which school do you rread Wafa?Nice to be friends with you Minahil
May 29th 2013
 
 
wafa What happen to you?Don't you talk to me why?why?why?yaar comment kar. Wafa
May 29th 2013
 
 
wafa Dear minahil! it's nice to meet you.Because of i don't have friend.chat with me.I am also 12.It's good job.In which school do you read?and where you live Wafa
May 28th 2013
 
 
Minahil You are most welcome and I am 12 I do not quite have a nick but my mother calls me Mano. Minahil
May 28th 2013
 
 
Tasneem Can any one tell me whats vshine's postal addres please tell me fast Tasneem
May 26th 2013
 
 
wafa Minahil i am in 9th class.What is your nick name?How old are you?i want to be your friend. Wafa
May 26th 2013
 
 
Minahil Oh I am in Sixth grade in which class do you read ? Minahil
May 25th 2013
 
 
wafa HEYY!!!!great job.In which class do you read?.My nick name is minahil but in short mino.CUZ minahil is my best friend Wafa
May 24th 2013
 
 
Minahil Do you think it is copied? well it isn't it was a class assignment,and as it turned out to be a nice one so I sent it to vshine Minahil
May 21st 2013
 
 
rabia Its gr8 Rabia
May 19th 2013
 
 
ABEEHA NIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIICE BUT SILLLLLLLLLLLLLY Abeeha
May 19th 2013
 
 
selina Splendid! Selina
May 19th 2013
 
 
Mahnoor Welllllll goooooooood if its not copieeeeedddd Mahnoor
May 17th 2013
 
 
Minahil Awwwww!thankyou dear friends. Minahil
May 16th 2013
 
 
Minahil I need likes Minahil
May 16th 2013
 
 
tehreem Well done...keep it up Tehreem
May 16th 2013
 
 
Minahil Thankyou well I wrote it myself Minahil
May 15th 2013
 
 
tehreem Its awsome Tehreem
May 15th 2013
 
 
 Sadia NiCe well Is that real ? no it can't be 8) but gr8 if you have writen it Sadia
May 14th 2013
 
 

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