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Gullasht Feyrozai
Gullasht Feyrozai
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Snow White And The Mystery Of Dracula (part 1)
Published On Sep 3rd 2013
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Once upon a time in the year of 1890 in Quetta, there is a girl named Snowhite. She was very beautiful. Her hair is black, curly and long and her eyes are also black in color. Her face is white like snow and lips are red as blood.
She was very beautiful. She was always run here and there. Her parents are always worried about it, because they think in teen age girls are so beautiful and some ghost can attack on them.
One day she saw her face in the mirror and, suddenly she feel something is behind on her. And she looks behind and there is nothing. Then she go to sleep and at 3:00 am her eyes become open. She hear some voice like this that somebody through something. She becomes scars and shouts loudly. Immediately her parents came and ask her ''Why are you shouting?''.Then she says nothing and become senseless.
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Aliza  Aamir Good yar Aliza Aamir
Apr 12th 2016
 
 
Shaheer BTW srry gulshat or dr gulshat. One never knows Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shaheer BTW tum logon ne note kya hoga ke I use btw tooooo much. Lol. Adat se majboor Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shaheer Btw guyz y is everyone saying her Dr. I dont understand. Btw apne aap ko drst krna chahye or dosron ko naseehat krni chahye or akthe rhna chahye. BTW ibrahim tum ne kaha ke we respect women nd girls. Mujhe btao ye respect thi jo tum nai ki? Women ki respect krni chahye lkn ibrahim jaisi izzt nhn.LOL. ye badtameezi thi.nd apne aap ko bhtr smjhna gharoor hai. For ur kindest info Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Umair Hey guys join this group if u r on fb https://www.facebook.com/groups/vshine123readers Umair
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Umair Nice story Umair
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shaheer Lol rafia gud answer. Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shaheer Ibrahim. You fight with everyone and afterwards realize ur mistake nd make LAME exscuses. Srry guyz I had to use this language. Ndbtwwho r u if not pakistani. Then y living in balochistan. Huh? Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shaheer I strongly agree with talha but sad thng is our elders dont thnk of it and they thnk casts matter Shaheer
Dec 31st 2015
 
 
Shumaim Thank you Ibrahim! Shumaim
Jun 26th 2014
 
 
Tooba Nice Tooba
May 2nd 2014
 
 
Ibrahim Shumaim,i dont know why the people are like this.but u r right.All the Baloch are not like this girl.ok my brother.... Ibrahim
Dec 30th 2014
 
 
Gullasht Its Okay Gullasht
Nov 9th 2013
 
 
Gullasht Its Okay Gullasht
Nov 9th 2013
 
 
Shumaim Ohh..sorry 4 the behavior of my sister, I know u r a girl n thats why u r different.Lets jst stop this fight and leave this topic,Okay Dr.Gullasht. Happy? Shumaim
Nov 8th 2013
 
 
Gullasht Like what ?? and you don' t me like thiz way Okay I hope you will understand Gullasht
Nov 7th 2013
 
 
Munkashay She knows you are a girl Gullasht, she's saying you are different cuz you are a girl. And PLEASE don't talk to my sister like that Munkashay
Nov 7th 2013
 
 
Gullasht I m girl Gullasht
Nov 6th 2013
 
 
Shumaim Dr. Gullasht...I already said I am not blaming anyone...nor taking anyone's side....please, I was jst trying to stop the fight for you as you said no one should fight on your stuff.That is all I said...And actually only balochi young boys...we can say new generation ones only do things like this...so that is why you are different...maybe your family is like you too...but mainly young balochi boys behve like this so I was saying it is not their fault...they can not help it. Sorry if I said something wrong. Shumaim
Nov 2nd 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA Shumain don't be over he said that they want Balochistan as a seprate country,if he loves Quetta and Baochistan so i also, loves it if he is Baloch so I m also, but I don't said anything like this rubbish Okay and don't be Too much over !............................. and don't support wrong things and if you support it so don't coment here Gullasht
Nov 2nd 2013
 
 
Shumaim Guys.....stop it, Ibrahim wasn't wrong at first, he just said he is Baloch and he likes Quetta.....all this became a big misunderstanding, everyone thought he is saying he is a Baloch first and a Muslim next but this is wrong...he didn't said anything like this. We know Baloch don't take Balochistan a province...they take it more than just their living place....they can give their life for it. So it's what they do...we shouldn't interrupt. I am not blaming anyone, I am just saying it was a big misunderstanding...let's just forget it. Thankyou. Shumaim
Oct 30th 2013
 
 
Munkashay U have written in present tense and not in past tense, that's the mistake. Munkashay
Oct 27th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AoA Fatima where you read it before??? Gullasht
Oct 20th 2013
 
 
Fatima Nice story but i have read it before many times Fatima
Oct 15th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim i am waiting for your reply on my story secret diary Maarij Maqsood
Sep 20th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim baloch wants independence From Pakistan.Am i right or not and again sorry Dr gullasht Maarij Maqsood
Sep 20th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim are you crazy.Ok i'll searched on google and one time more sorry Dr gullasht Maarij Maqsood
Sep 20th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooory we will fight on ur steps Ibrahim
Sep 19th 2013
 
 
eesha Ibrahim...........pakistanis r not jealous of baloch or balochi watever........tum baloch ho ya nahi is se humein koi frq nahi parta....aur seroiuly speaking mujhe tumhare kafi comments ki samaj nahi ate gramatical mistakes ki waja se.....i dont need to prove anything to u ibrahim...... Eesha
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
Gullasht A0A!!XXXXxxx huhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhHH !! guyz again say don't fight on my sufft,but Ibrahim don"t be over react o.K i can't say anything to you so, don't talk 2 me Gullasht
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
wafa Dr.gullashat how r u??? whtx ur rotine Wafa
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
wafa Dr.gullashat how r u??? whtx ur rotine Wafa
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
Rafia IBRAHIM .......... thatz hurted not hearted ........ ab tum phir bolo ge k yeh hearted hi ha .. jaese tum ne BALOCH BALOCH kia tha!! TOBA TOBA!!!! Allah na kare k aisa koi din aaye .... k hume grass khane parein ..... tumhari future plannings mujhe correct nahi lag rahein .... Allah se TOBA karni chahiye aur dua karni chahiye k aisa din na aaye .... but, tum ne to poore tayaari ki hui hai ........ TOBA TOBA!!! Rafia
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim SORRY MAARIJ IF I SAY MY RIGHTS THEN TOMORROW I WILL BE KILLED WILL U BE RESPONSIBLE FOR ME.MAARIJ WRITES IN GOGLE ((BALOCH WANTS WHAT IN PAKISTAN))) U WILL GET WHAT WE WANT Ibrahim
Sep 18th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim if you are not a pakistani.Then think,for example if there is no Pakistan.Quaid-e-Azam didn't get any country then wt u do.Then it be no balochistan no baloch no rights.A simple advice that think at relax mood. .;:::;;:;;:;::;: Dr gullast sorry for commenting at your stuff Maarij Maqsood
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim if you are not a pakistani.Then think,for example if there is no Pakistan.Quaid-e-Azam didn't get any country then wt u do.Then it be no balochistan no baloch no rights.A simple advice that think at relax mood. .;:::;;:;;:;::;: Dr gullast sorry for commenting at your stuff Maarij Maqsood
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim wts your rights i want to know.I think so you are over crazy about balochistan. Maarij Maqsood
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Ok from today i will not comment on your Story gullasht.give me prove that my saying is rong.and third whatever i am that is not your problem weather i am a baloch or pakistani that is not u people problem.from the first day i judged that every pakistani is jalas on Baloch.learn my pakistani brothers and sisters that is not far when u people would be comaled to eat grass............sorry if someone was hearted Ibrahim
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
Rafia EESHA IS ABSOLUETLY RIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!! Rafia
Sep 17th 2013
 
 
eesha Thnxx wafa dear for agreeing.. :) :) :) :) :) :) :) Eesha
Sep 16th 2013
 
 
eesha Ibrahim...First of all i didn't say u did a bad thing...n second of all the saying u told is totally wrong......i don't lyk to explain things to u.......i just say them cuz i want to clear my position...n sorry if u were hurt frm my comment......i never talked to u bout respect of daughters or watever......... and i think the pple of balochistan r called balochi...... Eesha
Sep 16th 2013
 
 
Eraj Good story!!!! Eraj
Sep 16th 2013
 
 
Rafia Sorry Gullasht ............ but if ppl comment lik that so it makes me feel hurt :( Rafia
Sep 15th 2013
 
 
Rafia Ibrahim ...... u respect???????????????????? just i don't know what to say!!!!! soooooooo badly u replied on my comment that my heart broke!!!!!!!! however I WAS RIGHT!!!!!! lik i mean which type of person u r?????? first of all u gave more value on being that BALOCH OR BALOCHI whatever ... then u misbehaved with my frnds so em removing u frm my frnd list !!!!!!!!! i just can't understand that u r like that .... i mean there are many other boys on vshine lik Talha Rabbani, ABDUR rAFYAY Khan and many others who do know the meaning of RESPECT!!! the way they comment can tell that they ARE gr8 Muslims ...... SHAME ON YOU IBRAHIM!! SHAME!!! Rafia
Sep 15th 2013
 
 
wafa Dr.gullashat asalam-u-alaikum!!! and plz cmnt on my stuff waitinf of ur cmnt Wafa
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
wafa Dr.gullashat asalam-u-alaikum!!! and plz cmnt on my stuff waitinf of ur cmnt Wafa
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA minahil now I can't decided that how many parts my story consists!!!............ Gullasht
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA minahil now I can't decided that how many parts my story consists!!!............ Gullasht
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA minahil now I can't decided that how many parts my story consists!!!............ Gullasht
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA minahil now I can't decided that how many parts my story consists!!!............ Gullasht
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AsSlama.0.Alaikum!!!!!.......... First for few previous days I can't use Vshine becuZ I m quite busy and guy zzzz plz !!.... Stop fighting on my stuff if Ibrahim bro is Baloch (its Baloch not Balochi) so, it's not his sin and if you are and Ibrahim both don't agree to each other so, as I told you before don't fight and comment no my stuff plz!!! Fight on another stuff Gullasht
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Minahil I guess ibrahim is a caste conscious person>Too bad:( Minahil
Sep 14th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Esha i have not said a bad word.That u should dislike and esha second..i am not a Balochi.I am Baloch.If u put my first name Baloch then it is ok.i have not did a bad thing i have just send u a friend request.There is a saying when you dont know someone then never explain him if u explain him it means u him or herself like this.All the girls are our daughters.....we respect them.......if someone thing bad about us then allah knows what to do with that person. Ibrahim
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
wafa I agree wid eesha the frend of miahil bukhtawar Wafa
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
eesha Balochi mujhe frnd request kiyon bheji???????i will not accept it,,,,cuz 1st of all u r boy and 2nd that u fought w8 ma frndz.........n u said that u r first balochi then muslim....n i am first muslim then pakistani.........SO SORRY Eesha
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
eesha SHAME on u Ibrahim Balochi.....i guess tumhara surname bhi balochi hai hana???????? Eesha
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
Hoora Nice pic of yours :D Hoora
Sep 13th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrah But i think that i am both muslim and pakistani and wts your right that you should need a separate country.Always baloch think that we are different Maarij Maqsood
Sep 12th 2013
 
 
wafa Dr. gullashat what is your rotine these days?can u tell me??????? Wafa
Sep 11th 2013
 
 
Rafia Hey!!! i didn't wanna fight Ibrahim........... but u urself wrote u r Balochistan ... that isn't possible!!!!! REALLY..... it's a province... and believe me a province never uses vshine !!!!!! TRULY!!! em exteremely sorry Ibrahim ... it seems u minded my comment alot!!!! SORRY....!!!!!! :) Rafia
Sep 11th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Rafia i am not a Balochi.Balochi is my mother language and i am a Baloch.first learn weather we are Baloch or Balochi then talk.advise Ibrahim
Sep 11th 2013
 
 
Minahil Dr.Gullasht AOA Can i ask you a question dear?Well'how many parts are you going to write this story in???Waiting 4 reply:) Minahil
Sep 10th 2013
 
 
Rafia Hey!!!! Ibrahim..... u r giving more value for being Balochi????? not Muslim????? thatz sooooo bad!!!!!!! I REALLY AGREE WITH U GULLASHT ......... Rafia
Sep 10th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Ok.i hate you Ibrahim
Sep 10th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA first behaves ur self Ibrahim not write dear ok if you write these cheap words then don't talk to me and as I told you that if you are not agree w8 me then don't comment on my stuff and first you are Baloch then, MUSLIMS strength and if you are not Pakistan then 4rm which country you represents????????? and plz !!!!!! I again said don't comment in my stuff plz!!!!!!! Huhhhhhh I hate Gullasht
Sep 9th 2013
 
 
Rafia I really really agree ..... we all r just united MUSLIMS & PAKISTANIS :) Rafia
Sep 9th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim First i am a Balochistan then i am a muslim i am not a pakistani ok dear Ibrahim
Sep 9th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA fisrt ibrahim v r MUSLIMS PAKISTANI'Sss!................ and if you are not agree with me soO, plz! don't talk to me and don't coment in stuff O.K and i knnow the new Ibrahim is your ID Gullasht
Sep 8th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Nice story tou must sent its next part.ibrahim no one is a Baloch No one is pakistani no one is a patan no one is a punjabi we all are Muslims and we all are brothers.i got ur feelings baloch rights must be give Ibrahim
Sep 8th 2013
 
 
talha Not punjabi,,,not balochi,,, not sindhi,,, not pathan....we are all muslims and pakistanis Talha
Sep 7th 2013
 
 
eesha Yep Ibrahim u have a problem of casts...........V r Muslims n v r Pakistanis....... Eesha
Sep 6th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AOA First of all thankzzz Ibrahim for your appreciation and for your information I m not BALOCH I'm PAKISTANI and my story is about of " Mystery of Dracula " and about QUETTA well I love Quetta and thankzzz for your suggetions well I mention my grammer prob!!.... That I have Cshine to improve our grammer and skills and have not to come in Turbet and not to join language centre o.K first you improves your spellings Dear Brother !.......... You have a habit to proud on cast huhhhh here we only PAKISTANI MUSLIMS not in casts well plz !!... Reply of it Gullasht
Sep 6th 2013
 
 
Maarij Maqsood Ibrahim you are Pakistani or not.I think so you are just baloch Maarij Maqsood
Sep 6th 2013
 
 
Ibrahim Dr.Gullasht your story snoe white in quetta is a great story please publish the next part soon because it is about quetta and we are baloch we like quetta like our heart.some grammar mistakes are in place of past tenses u r using present tenses .place care ur grammar mistake.Join a language center You ur grammar will be ok.If u want to make your grammar the best in pakistan then Come in Turbat....ok Ibrahim
Sep 6th 2013
 
 
eesha @Gullasht......... U r ryt v learn frm our mistakes Eesha
Sep 5th 2013
 
 
Gullasht AsSalam.OAlekum!!............ First of all now I can can't give time to Vshine as now I'm in first year and my now assessments finished which have been started since 27 Aug Dear'saSs. Telling you all of this because I'm not free to send the next part soon but if I see here Too much likes in my story so, Insa'Allah I will send the next part sOon !!....... And thanks for your appreciating and I know I do Too much grammar mistakes so here Vshine which gave us a platform to improve our grammer and skills. Gullasht
Sep 5th 2013
 
 
Rafia Thnx dear Maryam :):) Rafia
Sep 5th 2013
 
 
Maryam I'm with Rafia and Ayesha. Your story is great.WAITING for next. Maryam
Sep 5th 2013
 
 
eesha Snow White in Quetta :) ..........Nyc bt sum grammatical mistakes r there Eesha
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Soha Nice one Gullashat baji and plzz send next part soon! Soha
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
tehreem Its good Tehreem
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Ajwa Ookaay... Ajwa
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Rafia Frnds .... if anyone write anything so u should appreciate .... :) either u likes it or not!!!!!! :):):) Rafia
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Irum Many grammatical mistakes, but awesome.... Irum
Sep 4th 2013
 
 
Manahil Strange... Manahil
Sep 3rd 2013
 
 
Minahil Some grammatical mistakes Minahil
Sep 3rd 2013
 
 
Rafia What happened next???????????????????????????? it was gr8 Gullasht ...... send the next part soon !!!!!!!! Rafia
Sep 3rd 2013
 
 

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